Here's a commission for . He asked me to draw a busty girl with curly hair and a dress similar to one that Shirley Temple used to wear, except as a two-piece. He chose this pose, which was easier for me.
[link] I think here you had fallen in a pretty common mistake: "Boken Mirror"!(<--name invented just now) It consists in a (often casual) flaw or overlook in proportions, more specifically on eyes/face! (most common/basic case). It's like the more basic tool to transmit an emotion in a drawing is no other than eyes/face! They say that eyes are soul's mirror, you know? I think it's a fact! Human beings exists to communicate with eachother, "we are social beings"! (it's even a non "social" being? By social i mean "non fated to relate to other being"... and if that being exists, it must be a union of two!) ...So, face/eyes is what we "are", what gives us an "identity". In our profession, which are the usual/universal way to humanize everything? Giving eyes to everything (and other facial elements, but eyes are dominat) --- Well, i'm not gonna extend more on that matter, haha. Anyway, the first thing i see/look to in a drawing it's the face! If the face fails, then all fails! (the most important tool to transmit emotion fails = everything fails) And why did it fail? Just by Boken Mirror! And the worst part is the most of artists that make this mistake can do thins perfectly fine in other occasions! Like i said, is mostly a casual mistake... and you, like an artist, have to get rid of it!
That's all about the image correction. Another things i can say about your drawing: Legs seem to not work correctly with the body. Like they are to much stylized (= too much babylike/chlidlike in a mature upper body). Also... [link] (i don't know if that accessory is meant to be there. I think it's should be more close to pelvis -i think-)